Kann mir jemand mein Englisch Aufsatz korrigieren?

Muss in Englisch einen Aufsatz über mein Meerschweinchen schreiben. Ich habe erst seit einen Jahr Englisch und bin noch nicht so gut darin.

my Guinea pig Bonnie.

I have five guinea pigs at home but today i I tell you more about Bonnie. Bonnie is a 1 years old swiss teddy with red eyes and dark ears. She has long white fuzzy hair sometimes we have to cut it but only behind. I have her since last summer, she comed from a breeder from ######. At her first day she had to go to the vet. Because one of my other guinea pigs hit her in the face and her eye bleeding. The doctor gave her a syringe and eye drop. I had to give her two weeks eye drop. But now she don’t notice anymore. Bonnie is always ready to get her food as she is always the first one down to eat her veggies. She is the fastest Guinea of the five. She love to eat tomatoes. mostly it is a calm guinea pig but when she hear something rustle she screams very loud.Trying to clip her nails is a fight of death or life tho. Atleast that's what it must be like for her since he will flap his whole body around like a seal to escape. Ayana is the only other pig that Bonnie like the other not so. She argues a lot with the others.

3 Antworten

XJoX2203

16.12.2019, 21:55

Vergangenheit von come: came
Schreibe mit der Form it über dein Haustier oder suche dir he oder she aus(Du hast beides verwendet)
An der Stelle, wo du ihr Fell beschreibst würde ich schreinen: He/She/It has a ... fur(Fell) and her ears are red
Und dann natürlich noch, dass, wenn es um die dritte Person geht immer does/n‘t geschrieben wird. Also dann:,,But now she doesn‘t anymore. Sprachlich ist es zwar nicht perfekt, aber dafür dass du erst ein Jahr Englisch hast ist es doch ganz gut ;)

TheAllisons

17.12.2019, 06:51

Ayana is the only other „pigs“ that Bonnie like the other not so.
Solltest du ändern, pigs anstatt pig

AstridDerPu

Von gutefrage auf Grund seines Wissens auf einem Fachgebiet ausgezeichneter Nutzer

Englisch, Sprache, Aufsatz

16.12.2019, 22:10

my (RS) Guinea (RS) pig Bonnie (kein Punkt)

I have five guinea pigs at home (Komma) but today (---) I tell you more about Bonnie. Bonnie is a 1 years old (RS; Grammatik) swiss (RS) teddy with red eyes and dark ears. She has long white fuzzy hair (neuer Satz oder Relativsatz) sometimes we have to cut it but only behind (Wort). I have (Grammatik) her since last summer, she comed (Grammatik) from a breeder from ######. At (Präposition) her first day (Komma) she had to go to the vet (besser: we had to take her) (kein neuer Satz) Because one of my other guinea pigs hit (Grammatik) her in the face and her eye bleeding (Grammatik). The doctor (besser: vet) gave her a syringe (Wort) and eye drop (Wort/Grammatik).

I had to give her (Hier fehlt etwas.) two weeks eye drop (Wort/Grammatik). (Satzstellung)

But now she don’t (Grammatik) notice (Wort) anymore. Bonnie is always ready to get her food as she is always the first (---) down (unten, von wo?) to eat her veggies. She is the fastest Guinea (RS) of the five. She love (Grammatik) to eat tomatoes. mostly (RS, Wort, Komma) it (Warum änderst du das "Geschlecht"?) is a calm guinea pig but when she hear (Grammatik) something rustle she screams very loud (Grammatik).Trying to clip his (Warum änderst du das "Geschlecht"?) nails is a fight of Präposition) death or life tho (RS). Atleast (RS) that's what it must be like for her (Komma) since he (Warum änderst du das "Geschlecht"?) will flap his (Warum änderst du das "Geschlecht"?) whole body around like a seal to escape. Ayana is the only other pig that Bonnie like (Grammatik) the other not so (Formulierung). She argues (Wort) a lot with the others.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!

:-) AstridDerPu

Wir sollen in Englisch ein Alternative Ending für die Shortstory „Greyhound tragedy“ schreiben und ich wäre sehr dankbar wenn jemand meinen Text auf Rechschreibung und Grammatik korrigieren könnte.

She finally took up the courage to ask the salesman how much a ticket to Hollywood costs, when the Ford salesman passes by. She felt so brave and free and thought now nothing could stop her from her dream, but this feeling immediately stopped when the man, who sold the tickets told her that there is no bus that goes all the way to Hollywood. Hearing these words she felt like her whole dream was put in a jar and thrown down a cliff. All the years she felt like she was just a bus ride away from going to Hollywood and living the life she always dreamed of. The bus station was such a magical place for her, but now all these feelings she felt when passing the station will go away and it would just be an ordinary place for her. She tried to act cool like nothing happened, but when a young good looking man noticed her and asked if she was alright she couldn’t stand it anymore and her tears started rolling down her cheeks. The man tried to calm her down, but she just started hysterically telling her whole story while the tears already formed a little puddle on the floor. It was a releasing feeling for her and all her fears and thoughts seemed to be away in that one moment. As she wanted to thank the man for trying to comfort her she looked at him for the first time and recognized his face from the hundreds of movies she watched over and over again. It was Logan Smith, one of the most known actors of Hollywood, in her small hometown in Oregon. He felt sorry for her and wanted to give her the opportunity to go back to Hollywood with him to follow her dreams. She didn’t thought for even a second and immediately agreed to his suggestion.

During the 6 hour long ride from Oregon back to Hollywood the two got to know each other pretty well and Logan told her everything she needs to know to be successful in the media industry. About 30 minutes before they would have arrived in Hollywood they had an awful accident with another driver. The car both of them where in crashed into a tree and the other one down a small hill. When the police came they identified the two as dead and the driver of the other car was extremely injured, but he survived.

It didn’t took much time until the news got to know about Logan Smith‘s death and his name was everywhere. In every newspaper, magazine, TV-show or radio was a report about his death. But since he wasn’t alone in the car they all also mentioned Serena Thompson and even showed pictures of the young women from a small Oregon town.

Even five years later Serena Thompson is a name everyone thinks of, when passing the tree near Hollywood, where a picture of Logan and Serena will always remember of their Hollywood tragedy.

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Kann jemand meinen kurzen Englisch Text überfliegen und nach Fehlern suchen?

The main character of the short story „The swim team“ written by Miranda July in 2007, is named Maria, is 22 years old and lives alone in Belvedere, a small city, which is free from swimming pools. There is only a gas station and a market in Belvedere.
She would like to move, but she don’t have enough money (she don’t have a car or phone as well) and she don’t like to ask his parents, although she write every week to them. Her life is very boring (line 9-11), because she have nothing to do and no friends until she listens to a talk of three 80-years-old-persons, called Elizabeth, Kelda and Jack Jack, who can’t swim but they want to. So she suggests to teach them in swimming, because she learned in High School, and later she gives „swimming lessons“ to them twice a week in her living room with bowls of water and a kitchen floor. At the beginning of the story Maria is a little bit shy, she don’t like to speak with other people and starts tob e exited. (line 35-37) But at the end of the story Maria is a strong and purposeful coach, who dares to talk and to say what to do. (line 97-98) These swim lessons gives Maria something to do and she miss the lessons later.

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,,My best friend'' Englisch Aufsatz. Könnt ihr die Grammatik und die Rechtsschreibung verbessern?

My best friend ist Lena, but I call her Lea. She's 14 years old. She has brown eyes and long, brown hair. We have known us since 2007. She lives in the house next to me an we go into the same class. We often meet and go shopping or into the cinema. We always have fun together. Lea is honest, she can keep a secret to herself and she has a good character. But what I like most about her is that she's always there when I need her. I can't live without her. Our friendship is very important for me.

Ich finde es irgendwie zu kurz; habt ihr noch Vorschläge.

Ich bedanke mich im Voraus. l.G.

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Summary + Characterisation, korrektur, dringend?

Summery's: The shortstory ‚Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it, until a spring dance in their school comes. He forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance and does it, but she declines his question and at the end, both go not to the dance and go different ways too.

oder ..

The shortstory ‘Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it. In their school there goes a spring dance and the boy forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance, does it, but she just diclines his question and at the end, both of them, go not to the dance and go different ways too

was wirkt besser und richtiger, zumindest einigermaßen?

Characterisation The following text is a characterisation of the boy, one of the two main characters in the story ‘Patricia’.

The boy is a student around 16 or 17 years, how it could be assumed, because he is close to his final exams (l. 55) and his voice breaks and so ‘He [is] changing’(fg.l. 19). Furthermore the character seems to be very sporty and active, just look at the scene, where he stands in front of the mirror and ‘[looks] at himself’ and his muscles (fg.l.5) - what means, that he must be ambious too, because he worked hard, to get them. The boy could be characterized as really attentive, how the behavior shows it, related to Patricia (fg. l.7-19). ‘He [spend] an hour talking with her’ and ‘[think] a lot about asking her to go [with him]’, but he have not the guts to say directly, that he wants to go with her to the spring dance, what makes him not self-confident.

To sum it up, the boy is ambious as related to Particia, but calm, without selfconfidence, but (Mir fällt nicht ein, wie es genau zusammenfassen könnte :x)

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English Charakterisierung

Hey könnte mir einer sagen was ich noch verbessern kann, schreib morgen ne Englischarbeit. ;)

In the following text I tell you something about Agatha and her character. Agatha is a 36 years old and unattractive heavily-built woman, so that she search a long time ago for the ideal partner.Through it she get unconfident, it became obvious as she ask herself, why a handsome man write a letter to her. Moreover she is a little bit shy, because she look timidly as the look through the Café. Agatha is a punctual person too, cause she was at 3.00 at the Windham's Café. At the Café she wait along time, so that you can say she is patient. Because Agatha release a fake advertisement and send a fake picture, I must say that she is a cheater. All in all I can say that Agatha has a nice punctual and patient character, but she has a few mistakes too, like every other human.

Danke wäre echt nett wenn sich das einer angucken würde. :)

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Kann jemand meine kurze Cartoon Beschreibung korrigieren?

Hey Leute, ich hab ein Cartoon Beschrieben. Kann mir jemand vielleicht Tipps zur Beschreibung eines Cartoons geben und meine Fehler korrigieren?

<a href="https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/50/7e/25/507e252f9cf1f8e1c46851e0c2601da2.jpg">https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/50/7e/25/507e252f9cf1f8e1c46851e0c2601da2.jpg</a>

The single cartoon by Randy Glasbergen, taken from the website "www..." shows two persons who are dating for the first time.

On the left hand site of the cartoon is a man sitting on a chair and infront of him is a table. On this table is a open laptop which is standing also infront of him. The man is looking at the laptop. Above him is a speech bubble which says,"...". On the other site of the table is a woman sitting on a chair and holding a mobilephone. She is looking to the mobilephone. Next to her is a full wine glas. Above the woman is a speech bubble which says, "..". In the middle of the table is a candle. The scene is taking place at a restaurant.

The message of the cartoon is that both know eachother from online chats but on the first date they still communicate about technology to eachother because they do not know how to do it in real life.

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Summary oft the short story?

Summary:

The short storie Locker 160 written by Lee Busselmann is about two high school students,Karen and Julie who bully Miriam in three different ways.

First,Julie decides to write hate notice and puts it in Miriam's Locker 160 the next morning.

They are waiting for their victim and they are waiting to see how she reacts.

The second way of preparation is to put marbles in a plastic bag and place it in Miriam's Locker.

Karen and Julie are waiting for Miriam to arrive to head to her Locker.

They notices that as she opens her Locker,

the marbles clatters down the hallway.

The third and the last way is prepare a voodoo doll of Miriam use a large carrot in the shape of her body and an onion with one black yarn so as to form her head.

They are waiting for Miriam to come to their biology class before the lesson begin.

But Miriam isn't there.

She has turn on the gas stove at home and the rescue squad has arrives at the school on the way the save Miriam.

The narrator seems to be involved in all three ways but just based on his thoughts because of the way he talks during the short story.

Koennte mir vielleicht eine ""Englischlehrerin"" am liebsten frisch von ihrem Lehramtstudium meine summary of the short story aufgrund der inhaltlichen,sprachlichen sowie die Darstellungsleistung korrigieren und mir auch die korrigierte Satzumstellung und das Hinzufuegen fehlender Vokabeln und mir die Fehler in bunt oder in fettgedruckter Schrift sichtbar markieren?Vielen Dank fuer den Zeitaufwand.

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Twilight Inhaltsangabe englisch?

Hallo ^^ ich muss Mittwoch ein Referat auf Englisch über Twilight halten. Ich hab schon einen Text und wollte gerne wissen ob die Inhaltsangabe so geht :) Danke schon mal für alle Tipps ♥

The Story begin, when Bella has to move to the rainy Forks to live with her dad. She is miserable about it, but she thinks it is the best, after her mother married again. At her new school she quickly found friends. When Bella is seated next to Edward Cullen in class on her first day of school, Edward her. He disappears for a few days, but warms up to Bella and they get friends. But then Bella is nearly crushed by Tyler's van. Edward saves Bella when he instantaneously appears next to her and stops the van with his hands. Bella becomes determined to discover how Edward saved her life. After a family friend, Jacob Black, tells her the local tribal legends, Bella concludes that Edward and his family are vampires who drink animal blood. Bella is saved by Edward again in Port Angeles when she is almost attacked. He then takes Bella to dinner and then on the drive home she tells him a theory that he is a vampire. Edward confesses that he initially avoided Bella because the scent of her blood was too desirable to him. Over time, Edward and Bella fall in love. As Edward, his family and Bella play Baseball outside, three other vampires come and smell Bellas blood. Edward saves her before the vampires can bite her but one of the vampires James, a tracker, wants to hunt bella just for Fun. The Cullens send Bella to hide in a Hitel in Phoenix. Later Bella gets a call from James. He tells her that he kidnapped her mother. Bella leaves without saying something to anyone to her old ballettstudio because she thinks to find her mother there. As she notices that its a trap, it's already too late. James broke her leg and bit her. But Edward and the other Cullens rescues her. He had to suck all the poison out of her, through biting her aswell- James got killed.

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Kann einer bitte den Text (auf Englisch) Korrektur lesen?

Hallo,

Kann einer den Text bitter Korrektur lesen?

Jing-mei’s mother is one of the main characters and the antagonist in the short story “Two Kinds“ by Amy Tan. Her real name is not mentionend in the story, the reader only knows her as the mother of Jing-mei.

Jing-mei’s mother is a Chinese immigrant who came to the United States in 1949. She lost her parents, her family home and her first husband with whom she had two twin daugters in China (ll.6-8). After losing her family, she married again and became pregnant with her daughter Jing-mei. With her second husband and her daughter Jing-mei, she lives in the “Sacramento“ Street in Chinatown, a city in Carlifornia (ll.46-47)

The short story does not give any information about the appearance of Jing-mei’s mother, but the reader gets to know that Jing-mei’s mother beliefs in the American Dream. She´s conviced of it that in America anyone can become something and that you can become succesful no matter which kind of background you have (ll.1-6). That´s why she wants her daughter to become a child prodigy (l.4). She´s very determined and thinks that Jing-mei can become famous even though she does not have any special abilities in something.

One day Jing-mei’s mother and Jing-mei watch Shirley Tempel, a child actress, dancer and singer, on televison and Jing-mei’s mother decides to turn her daughter into a Chinese Shirley tempel (ll.10-14). She´s so fascinated with that idea that she signs up her daughter to beauty training school to make her prepared for her career as a child prodigy (ll.17-20). At the beauty traing school, her daughter messes up her hair and Jing-mei’s mother gets angry and calls her daughter a “Chiniese negro“(l.19-21). This line shows how important the career of Jing-mei is for her mother. She want everything to be perfect and gets quickyly strict and annoyed when something does not work out how she wants it.

Besides that Jing-mei’s mother is very ambitious. She tests every night after dinner her daughter by asking her questions from magazines that she takes with her after cleaning the houses of other people. She also takes other children as examples to show her daughter what kind of talent this children have (ll.36-39). In addiition, Jing-mei’s mother is very relentless, she makes the tests harder and overexerts her daughter by asking her questions that she can not answe (ll.50-52). This behaviour of Jing-mei’s mother pushes Jing-mei under pressure and lets her feel like a failure because most of the questions she can´t answer properly.

Danke im Voraus

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Come in Shila Inhaltsangabe in Englisch so ok?

Hey Ihr lieben....

The story "Come in, Sheila" is about an australian girl who listens to the radio where she has heard some information about a sheep killing dingo and that the first person who is able to find the dingo and the hole in the fence, that should protect sheeps from dingos, will earn 10$

Sheila instantly leaves her house, jumps in the jeep and tries to find what's wanted to earn the bounty. After a few minutes of driving around in her car she starts worrying about whether the old jeep was the right choice to drive through the desert. After noticing that one of the tyres run flat she realizes that it wasnt. Luckily her car ends up where the hole in the fence and the dingo family is but just in the next moment she hears a loud shot and one of the dingos hit the ground. Sheila stands up because the noice scared her and the next shot hit her and she goes down again. After a long time a rescue plane, which was called by Sheilas worried mom, lands near Sheila who waves her hand and the noice frightens away one of the dingos who just began sneaking towards Sheila.

Ist die Inhaltsangabe so ok oder sollte ich was verbessern?? Bitte Vorschläge!! Dankeee :))

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Interpretation auf Englisch... Ist die hier ok? Könntet ihr die für mich korrigieren? :) Tipps?

Interpretation

The text „My best friend dumped me“ is written by Haylie. She is a girl from California. The text is telling about the end of the friendship between Samantha and Haylie. One day Samantha – Haylies best freind - had written a text message to Haylie, while Haylie was sitting at home, reading a magazine. Some time later, as Haylie read the message she was really shocked, because Samantha had written: „We can´t be friends anymore!“ At first Haylie didn´t know why she wanted to dump their friendship. She culdn´t understand it and was really confused and sad. She thought that she was a good friend to her and couldn´t understand why. She wrote back immediately and asked Samantha why she didn´t want to be her friend anymore... And then Samantha wrote a list to her with many reasons why. At first she was really mad, but after she calmed down, she could understand it. She had been very clingy and stuck like a glue on her... And she wished she could turn it back. She thought about why she was so clingy. She was so clingy, because she was scared to loose Samantha as her best friend. She was very popular at school since she was there as the new girl. Haylie had liked her right from the start, because she was friendly and down-to-earth. Haylie wished she hadn´t been as clingy as she was. But now it was really over. It was too late to change it. The next days she apologized and tried to tell Samantha why she was acting like this. But Samantha didn´t want to talk to her. She just ignored her. A few days later she talked tot her again. But now there was a wall between them. They were friends again. But no best freinds anymore. And she swore to be a better friend next time. She had learned from it and hopes, that other people also can learn from her mistakes. Her last sentece was: „Believe in my words, because it´s no fun being dumped by your best friend.“

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Australian Connection-Charakterisierung(Dani)

Hallo :) Wir sollen eine Charakterisierung über die Person Dani aus dem Buch Australian COnnection schreiben :) Dies habe ich auch gemacht..aber ich bin mir nicht sicher ob das eine richtige charaktisierung ist..könntet ihr mir vllt. sagen ob das richtig ist? DANKE im voraus :*

Chapter 2: Dani is a girl and she is very tall for his sage and Alex finds she is incredibly beautiful. She has long dark hair, blue eyes and golden skin. Dani is the neighbor from Alex Dad and his new wife and the Babysitter from the two little kids. She is very interested in Alex. Dani is the local pop star and sing in the band ,,The Beat Crew”. I think Dani is a confident person because she stay to what is it and she has no problems with negative reaction to the band. But I think also she is an ambitious person because she says that she and their band will be soon playing in England. Dani is, think I, in love with Alex because she invites him at the first day to come to the “concert” from their band and she asked him at the night if he played guitar in their band.

PS: wir sollten nur eine Charakterisierung über Chapter/Kapitel 2 machen..also was da von ihr vor kommt

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'Summary' von 'Snakeman von Paul Davenport'

Ich muss morgen eine Klausur über dieses Buch schreiben. Ich will euch eine Summary über das Buch schreiben

bitte tipps

In this book Cathy, the new pupil at Portland High is threaten by the Snakeman and his gang.

Cathy, who comes from New York, is new at Portland High. First, she meets Jamie and he interwiews her, because Jamie is in the newspaper-team. Later she knows Gorden Baker, but she calls him Snakeman, because he is big and slim. The Snakeman and his gang threaten Cathy, they extort money from her and want to hurt her and her brother Mike. Mike is jounger than Cathy. She tries the non- resistance tactic, but it does not work. Later, Cathy tells her problem to Jamie and her mother, Eileen. Jamie asks Cathy to be in the newspaper-team and she says ok. They want to go to police, but they haven't any proof. Then they want to publish an article about the Snakeman and his gang, but Ms. Southerland, the boss of the newspaper-team rejects it! Later they publish the article without the permission from Ms. Souterland and they must to go to Dr. Callahan, the principal. The mayor(Bürgermeister) comes to Dr. Callahan and says that he likes the newspaper. They have a press conference. They make Quotes with the other victims of Snakeman.

Finally, they get a massage that the Snakeman is died. bewerten bitte

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Englisch-Summary cf

Hey community,

hab mal grad ne Summary von einem Text aus meinem Buch geschrieben.

Um ehrlich zu sein, war ich nie der beste darin, ich bin jetzt eig. auch richtig am verzweifeln wieso mir einfach nichts einfällt um ne gute Summary zusammen zu fassen..

Vorab gesagt, der Text ist sicherlich nicht der Burner.... also bitte habt mitleid mit mir wenn es auch der größte schei** ist, ich bin auch schon am arbeiten, sodass es sich verbessert.

Aber whatever.. hier ist der Text...

The text "Maddy Johnson´s double life" written in the year 2000 in London, by an unknown Autor, deals with a girl who suffers from bulima and how she try to life with it. Maddy Johnson a attractive and young women, who is popular in her community has a double life. In the public she is a normal person but in the secret one she suffers from bulimia. If she see a restaurant she cant control herself, she dont want to go in but she have to do it. As she goes in the restaurant she buy something big to eat with a bad feeling, because she is ashamed if somebody see her eating. When she finish her eat she feels dirty and hates herself.She goes to the toilet to threw up her food. At the moment when she leaves the toilet a women speak to her if all is ok and if she want help from her. She gives the phone number to the girl and asks her to call when she need help.

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