Englisch email korrigieren?
Hallo, ich muss ein e-mail schreiben über die Ängste und die Hoffnung eines Mädchen. Dabei muss ich ihr ein Rat geben. Kann jemand mir bitte dieses korrigieren?
danke für die Verbesserung
Dear Keiarnya,
I read your report of life.
I can share your fears about the influence of social media. It seems that girls submit to pressure to conform : to look beautiful like a media role model. I also feel your pressure at school and your hope to get into university and later to get a good job. You are not the only one with this expections to earn money so you don't have financially problems like your mother. you seems to be on the right way,because you search for your identity and live your own life. You don't care about the pressure of social media, however social media offers you useful information . You seem also to be purposeful, so never give up and make your dreams real. I think it is normal that you are stressed, but you have to do a lot of work and to exert yourself to be successful and be proud of yourself.
But try to enjoy your life as much as possible.
I hope your dreams will be true , wish you all the best
Hagar
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Hallo,
es sind eine Reihe Rechtschreib-, Wort- und Grammatikfehler enthalten.
Für eine Korrektur wirst du dir aber schon die Mühe machen müssen, den Text hier reinzuhacken. So ist eine Korrektur viel zu mühsam und aufwändig!
AstridDerPu
Dear Keiarnya,
I read your report of life.
I can share your fears about the influence of social media. It seems that girls submit to pressure to conform : to look beautiful like a media role model. I also feel your pressure at school and your hope to get into university and later to get a good job. You are not the only one with this expections to earn money so you don't have financially problems like your mother. you seems to be on the right way,because you search for your identity and live your own life. You don't care about the pressure of social media, however social media offers you useful information . You seem also to be purposeful, so never give up and make your dreams real. I think it is normal that you are stressed, but you have to do a lot of work and to exert yourself to be successful and be proud of yourself.
But try to enjoy your life as much as possible.
I hope your dreams will be true , wish you all the best
Hagar